no reason for you to be nervous about what youn write, EVER.
just one thing: I think you use too many exclamation points. I keep seeing the characters screaming and waving their hands like crazy, and it somehow breaks the pathos.
but that's just me and my retorted brain, you know. 'sides, apart from that you're too good for your own good.
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Date: 2008-10-29 03:55 pm (UTC)just one thing: I think you use too many exclamation points. I keep seeing the characters screaming and waving their hands like crazy, and it somehow breaks the pathos.
but that's just me and my retorted brain, you know. 'sides, apart from that you're too good for your own good.